Verbesserung – FB Adjective + preposition

Erreichte Note: 4.8

5. I felt very ashamed of making such a stupid mistake. 

10. It took some time to get accustomed to the slowet pace of life in the country after the frantic atmosphere of the town. 

13. They built nuclear power stations so as not to be dependent on coal as their main source of energy. 

14. This is not really relevant to our discussion so can we get back to the main point of the meeting?

FB – Text „Job’s“

Erreichte Note: 5.0
Verbesserte Note: 5.5

Do you think it’s useful for students to hear about people’s jobs?

In my opinion, it depends on the age of the students. At the younger age, like 12-14 years, it’s really useful. Even when they are a little younger, it may be interesting for them to see what, for example, their parents do for a living, but it’s not necessarily useful.
At the age of 13, the students don’t know what kind of profession they want to have, so they can benefit from the adults and decide, which way they want to go. They have the chance to experience a lot of different professions, so they can tell, what kind of professions are good for them.
But after this process, at the age of 14-16, the students know, what job they want they want, or at least which way they want to go, so it’s pretty unnecessary to heat about other people’s jobs. Maybe it’s interesting for them, to hear about other people’s experiences with their jobs, but it’s possibly useles. However, many 16 years old students exist, which have no idea what they want to be as adults. Of course, it’s still useful for them, to hear about different jobs. But at the end of the day, we are all different. For some it’s useful, for some not.

Do you think it’s useful for students to hear about people’s jobs? – Correction

In my opinion, it depends on the age of the students. At the younger age, like 12-14 years, it’s really useful. Even when they are a little younger, it may be interesting for them to see what, for example, their parents do for a living, but it’s not necessarily useful.
At the age of 13, the students don’t know what kind of profession they want to have, so they can benefit from the adults and decide which way they want to go. They have the chance to experience a lot of different professions, so they can tell what kind of professions are good for them.
But after this process, at the age of 14-16, the students know what job they want they want, or at least which way they want to go, so it’s pretty unnecessary to heat about other people’s jobs. Maybe it’s interesting for them to hear about other people’s experiences with their jobs, but it’s possibly useless. However, many 16 years old students exist whose have no idea what they want to be as adults. Of course, it’s still useful for them to hear about different jobs. But at the end of the day, we are all different. For some it’s useful, for others not.

Text – Touching The Void

Touching The Void
Task 1
Why, in your opinion, do people like Joe and Simon need such extreme challenges? Describe a personal challenge in your life. How do/did you cope?

 

There are many people who need extreme challenges, and I can’t exactly understand them. I don’t need such extreme things, but I like challenges, so I can understand them a bit. I think they’ve done this to show everyone how great they are, and also to show themselves, what they can achieve.

From this angle, my life is pretty boring. I’ve never been in an extreme challenge, and I never feared for my life. My body and my mind aren’t that fit, so I actually struggle everyday just a little bit. It’s also a challenge for me, but it isn’t that difficult.

My newest challenge is to lose weight and get rid of my anancastia, and that is extremely challenging for me. It doesn’t sound that hard, but for me it’s very exhausting.

Verbesserung – Text „C’est moi“

C’est moi

Je m’appelle Janice Huwiler et je suis 17 ans. Je suis né en 6. Février 1999 à Saint Gall. Ma nationalité est suisse. Je suis très joyeuse mais mon principal défaut est l’impatience.
Mon occupation préférée c’est l’équitation depuis j’étais 5 ans. Mon rêve est avoir un cheval islandais et participer des compétitions.
Mon repas et ma boisson préféré sont Sushi et thé aux fruits.
Ma music préfère est « Drum and Bass ».
J’aime jouer avec l’ordinateur. Mon jouet préféré actuellement est « Overwatch » e j’aime jouer lui avec mes copains.
Je habit avec ma mère à Stachen.
J’ai un beau-frère et il s’appelle Tim.  Il aime jouer le foot. Il habite à Goldach avec mon père et ma belle-mère, et je visite leur chaque deuxième semaine.

 

C’est moi – Correction

Je m’appelle Janice Huwiler et j’ai 17 ans. Je suis né le 6 février 1999 à Saint Gall. Ma nationalité est suisse. Je suis très joyeuse mais mon principal défaut est l’impatience.
Mon occupation préférée c’est l’équitation depuis j’étais 5 ans. Mon rêve est avoir un cheval islandais et participer des compétitions.
Mon repas et ma boisson préféré sont Sushi et thé aux fruits.
Ma music préfère est « Drum and Bass ».
J’aime jouer avec l’ordinateur. Mon jouet préféré actuellement est « Overwatch » e j’aime jouer lui avec mes copains.
Je habit avec ma mère à Stachen.
J’ai un beau-frère et il s’appelle Tim.  Il aime jouer le foot. Il habite à Goldach avec mon père et ma belle-mère, et je visite leur chaque deuxième semaine.